Thanks for posting. The reworked renderings look great! From a first glance of the page layouts, these came to mind:
Too many texts: Simply your writing as much as possible and allow big headings to dictate the content. What is the first read? Second read?
Tell the story through sketches: The centerpiece of your portfolio needs to be your sketches. Allow viewers to slowly move through your sketches and read after your thought process. As of now, you are being too ambitious by putting in all sketches into few pages. It's okay to spread them out over multiple pages. Don't put in too many sketches into one page. Vary size of sketches. Take time to fix each sketch and enhance their appearance. Portforlio crafting will be the most time consuming part of this process. Just by having a good layout, your project can look better by multiple factors.
Branding of the project: Try to come up with certain way of branding your concept. How will this project look different from others in your book? Think of using certain color theme, graphics, font types, background... look at magazines and fashion catalogues for inspirations. Go to a bookstore and look for photography or graphic arts books that have strong theme with minimal, simple layout
Package drawing: try more realistically drawn silouette of the powertrain components. They look too boxy and oversimplified. Pay close attention to detail content of this page. Do you have benchmarking vehicles? Concept description? Captions under each component? Carefully choose color scheme.
Newsprint sketches: How about eracing out the gray tone in the background and mix them with other sketches?
Good follow up on the package drawing and silouette function story.
There still are too many sketches on each page. The pencil sketches... they need to exist in varying sizes. Thinking as evidenced in the series of sketches... is how you want to steal viewer's attention. It's not about rendering. As these are laid out, there really isn't too much difference compared to your original.
Hi David, thanks for the comment. I remember you saying when we first started that the good portfolios have tons of sketches. I want to showcase that I've done alot of exploration on this project, is there an alternative way of showing that without having alot of sketches per page?
the storyboard looks more pleasant than the first but it's still lacking the point on which information I'm supposed to look at first. What do you want viewers to see first?
I would the viewer to read the description of the race first (although I doubt anyone will delve into the block of text), then more onto the design keywords and inspirations on the right.
Thanks for posting. The reworked renderings look great! From a first glance of the page layouts, these came to mind:
ReplyDeleteToo many texts: Simply your writing as much as possible and allow big headings to dictate the content. What is the first read? Second read?
Tell the story through sketches: The centerpiece of your portfolio needs to be your sketches. Allow viewers to slowly move through your sketches and read after your thought process. As of now, you are being too ambitious by putting in all sketches into few pages. It's okay to spread them out over multiple pages. Don't put in too many sketches into one page. Vary size of sketches. Take time to fix each sketch and enhance their appearance. Portforlio crafting will be the most time consuming part of this process. Just by having a good layout, your project can look better by multiple factors.
Branding of the project: Try to come up with certain way of branding your concept. How will this project look different from others in your book? Think of using certain color theme, graphics, font types, background... look at magazines and fashion catalogues for inspirations. Go to a bookstore and look for photography or graphic arts books that have strong theme with minimal, simple layout
Package drawing: try more realistically drawn silouette of the powertrain components. They look too boxy and oversimplified. Pay close attention to detail content of this page. Do you have benchmarking vehicles? Concept description? Captions under each component? Carefully choose color scheme.
ReplyDeleteNewsprint sketches: How about eracing out the gray tone in the background and mix them with other sketches?
Awesome awesome tips, much appreciated David!
ReplyDeleteGood follow up on the package drawing and silouette function story.
ReplyDeleteThere still are too many sketches on each page. The pencil sketches... they need to exist in varying sizes. Thinking as evidenced in the series of sketches... is how you want to steal viewer's attention. It's not about rendering. As these are laid out, there really isn't too much difference compared to your original.
Hi David, thanks for the comment. I remember you saying when we first started that the good portfolios have tons of sketches. I want to showcase that I've done alot of exploration on this project, is there an alternative way of showing that without having alot of sketches per page?
ReplyDeletesure, spread them out into multiple pages! you want to show your sketches, not hide them by making them invisible in sea of small sketches.
DeleteOk, thanks David
ReplyDeletethe storyboard looks more pleasant than the first but it's still lacking the point on which information I'm supposed to look at first. What do you want viewers to see first?
ReplyDeleteI would the viewer to read the description of the race first (although I doubt anyone will delve into the block of text), then more onto the design keywords and inspirations on the right.
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