Very good progression from the previous stage, in terms of the look department. The only weakness is that the vehicle still is trying too hard to conceal it's packaging-battery mechanism, power train, etc.
It's getting better and better! Lots of eye candies, love it.
Try more plan views. It definitely will add more entertainment look to the pages. Explore dead front and rear view as well. On your chain battery idea, try finding a cool pictorial reference and inspiration as you have done with the snakeskin. It'll tell better story.
With high eyeview sketch like the one in pg. 4, be sure to draw cast shadow that follows your vehicular shape/silhouette (we haven't really discussed about this yet) so that the shadow accentuates the form narrative your design is telling. You can let the shadow drop on the ground as well as walls around the car (walls can be flat, landscaped, etc). Shadows don't always have to be shaded. They can also be boxed in / delineated; just use it as your design tool to enhance your presentation.
Also think about the engine/motor, cargo, etc. This might require the bottom of vehicle to have bulges/protrusions/silhouette that will be necessary to accommodate such components. Keep rotating your vehicles because with subtle differences you are putting in, repeated perspective views will add to boredom.
Hi Tom. For this series, I think more exploration of the rear design would be a good idea. Considering that the rear design hasn't been explored enough, I'm afraid that it might end up looking like an afterthought. While designing the rear, try to relate the design language to rest of the vehicle. And when packaging the vehicle, try not to waste space. In fact, having the vehicle tightly wrap around the packaging will give a better result to the design as well.
Batteries: How will the batteries shed themselves? If your batteries are disposable, there must be a way to simply communicate it to the viewer in simplicity and clarity. I am not saying that the design should look boring. Instead, make it look sensible and provocative--provoke questions to viewers to wonder "Wow! What can this be?!" As of now, the battery placement just looks as if they are buckled around the rear.
Nice effort with the battery ideas. Be careful not to make the design look too utilitarian. The initial four pages have more pleasant visuals in my opinion.
Very good progression from the previous stage, in terms of the look department. The only weakness is that the vehicle still is trying too hard to conceal it's packaging-battery mechanism, power train, etc.
ReplyDeleteTom, be sure to vary perspective views. Patterned appearance will give your pages to look like wall patterns. And stay sketchy!
ReplyDeletethanks for the comments david, will keep in mind!
ReplyDeleteIt's getting better and better! Lots of eye candies, love it.
ReplyDeleteTry more plan views. It definitely will add more entertainment look to the pages. Explore dead front and rear view as well. On your chain battery idea, try finding a cool pictorial reference and inspiration as you have done with the snakeskin. It'll tell better story.
With high eyeview sketch like the one in pg. 4, be sure to draw cast shadow that follows your vehicular shape/silhouette (we haven't really discussed about this yet) so that the shadow accentuates the form narrative your design is telling. You can let the shadow drop on the ground as well as walls around the car (walls can be flat, landscaped, etc). Shadows don't always have to be shaded. They can also be boxed in / delineated; just use it as your design tool to enhance your presentation.
Also think about the engine/motor, cargo, etc. This might require the bottom of vehicle to have bulges/protrusions/silhouette that will be necessary to accommodate such components. Keep rotating your vehicles because with subtle differences you are putting in, repeated perspective views will add to boredom.
ReplyDeleteGreat tips David, will definitely implement these on the next batch of sketches!
ReplyDeleteHi Tom. For this series, I think more exploration of the rear design would be a good idea. Considering that the rear design hasn't been explored enough, I'm afraid that it might end up looking like an afterthought. While designing the rear, try to relate the design language to rest of the vehicle. And when packaging the vehicle, try not to waste space. In fact, having the vehicle tightly wrap around the packaging will give a better result to the design as well.
ReplyDeleteBatteries: How will the batteries shed themselves? If your batteries are disposable, there must be a way to simply communicate it to the viewer in simplicity and clarity. I am not saying that the design should look boring. Instead, make it look sensible and provocative--provoke questions to viewers to wonder "Wow! What can this be?!" As of now, the battery placement just looks as if they are buckled around the rear.
Nice effort with the battery ideas. Be careful not to make the design look too utilitarian. The initial four pages have more pleasant visuals in my opinion.
ReplyDeleteThanks David. Yeah I think so too. I'll try to see if I can make the battery configuration more visually appealing before our session today.
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